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Examining ACT Essay Examples
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We fork out a lot of time speaking about most of the essential the different parts of a good ACT style essay. In this episode we’re going to have a look at some sample essays that have been compiled by actual students in response to an ACT style prompt. Furthermore they certainly were graded by actual teachers and evaluated regarding the ACT Rubric, so just a reminder the Rubric will probably consider seven indicators for the ACT within their comprehension of task, position, complexity, development, organization, sentences and word choice and grammar. So why don’t we take a good look at those essays to discover the way they compare well in the scale.
Let’s take a good look at example essay number one, go right to the bonus materials and download it. It scored an 11 this means one teacher gave it a five and something teacher gave it the most possible points, that has been a six. I’m going to go through the initial paragraph with you but, it will be needed for you to contain it printed out in front of you. Alright therefore it starts, ‘the problem that is perennial schools in the country today is dropout rates. This stubborn blight has refused to go away despite of a variety of methods enacted by schools to eradicate it. In a school that is certain two of those methods have been proposed-either offering free tutoring or offering a wider variety of classes. Even though notion of free tutoring sounds attractive, the clear answer is based on offering a wider number of classes, which ultimately encourages students in which to stay school.’ This essay continues on to provide ample support of factual statements about why it is vital to give a wider selection of classes and furthermore really hummers home a counter that is strong that shows why free tutoring just will not work. Let us take a look at how it measures as much as a few of the key indicators that we have discussed earlier. We will lump some of those indicators together simply for easy sake since they really go hand in hand. So let us speak about how it did with ‘task and position.’ This essay did an extremely solid job of setting up the task, showing an awareness from it and then taking a strong position. Very clearly the essay states, ‘The solution is based on offering a wider number of classes, which ultimately encourages students to stay in school.’ They truly are not straddling in the fence, they inform you what it is they’re going to prove which they is going with ‘the offering a wider number of classes,’ and gives the main reason. The reason for it is that ‘it ultimately encourages students in which to stay school.’
Alright why don’t we have a look at ‘Complexity and development.’ So let me reveal where the readers are really looking so that you could show a worldwide view that you have considered all different viewpoints after which supported it with specific examples. Therefore we’re going to take a look at three spots in this essay where this writer really does a job that is great. The very first put the writer tops is, ‘the biggest reason behind students dropping away from school is not inability but apathy. what my not brighten those paths is free tutoring. This technique depends on the belief that is erroneous bad grades result in dropping out.’ So the reason I pulled this put is an extremely great example is that this writer presents a very interesting premise, rather than just saying we usually have a wider selection of classes me correct the prompt actually. because it provides motivation, this writer kind of is out on a limb and says ‘well let’ Instead of stating that ‘the issues with schools is dropping out due to inability’ which will be what suggested I’m going to venture out there and say that it is apathy. So that it suggests an interesting premise which is really great complexity there. Another neat thing that this essay does is ‘Although the concept of free tutoring sounds attractive, offering a wider selection of classes to attract students of each stripe is thus the preferred method.’ So here we have that counter argument. Therefore it introduces this idea ‘although the notion of free tutoring sounds attractive,’ but then it goes ahead and dismisses it like we said within the counter argument episode could be the method to create that strong counter argument.
Finally the essay says ‘The encouragement produced by an interesting class often spills into other classes as well. When a learning student is enthusiastic about a course, he is encouraged to exert effort harder.’ Here an example is had by us. Now I think this example might be a bit that is little specific by speaing frankly about a particular student or perhaps specific classes and possibly that’s why among the scorers gave it a five as opposed to a basics six. But it’s a good backup, it is good support to exhibit that offering a wider selection of classes will actually encourage students to stay in school, so quite strong complexity, very development.
Organization essay that is wise one is solid, it is logical, it introduces the counter argument also it really expands on the arguments that it is making.
The main one thing that is really nice it is that essay no. 1 is a great illustration of using natural transitions. And we also talked about that in an early on episode, but the following is just a example that is really solid. It ends with all the sentence, ‘Furthermore, their grades improve various other classes as a result, brightening their paths to graduation. in the event that you glance at the end of body paragraph number one’
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